I'm going out on a limb by posting my new and improved (I hope) query. I figured since I was going through the trouble of overhauling my ms, I should do the same with my query. Please let me know what you think. I'm REALLY struggling with the tag line, and I might just dump it all together and not use one (I didn't use one in my last batch queries). Again, PLEASE let me know if you think it works or not (I'm leaning towards 'not'). Also, I know it looks long, but it does meet the "12 pt/1" margins/1 page" rule. Thanks in advance for any feedback!!
Dear
When recently widowed Ellie Langston finds herself falling for her much younger and happily engaged coworker, she learns the hard way that timing truly is everything.
Thirty-five-year-old Ellie has struggled with bouts of depression for years, but when her husband dies, she’s thrown into a darkness so deep, it almost takes her life. Four months later, Ellie is on the mend, but now finds herself dealing with other obstacles, such as; going back to work after a ten-year hiatus, raising her pre-teen daughters alone, and dealing with an overprotective mother. The one thing she doesn’t have to worry about is her growing friendship with her new coworker, Aiden. Ellie can’t help but be wooed by the twenty-five-year-old’s good looks and English charm, but what appeals to the ever-anxious Ellie is his friendliness and carefree spirit.
Aiden is happily engaged, and since Ellie is recently widowed, there’s a mutual unavailability that keeps the relationship from crossing any lines. However, one slow-dance during the company Christmas party changes everything. Ellie and Aiden both realize there is something more brewing under the guise of their easy-going friendship. Aiden is ready to give up everything to pursue the unlikely romance. Ellie, however, is unable to break free from the tangled weed of guilt, fear, and responsibility that controls her. After the year she has been through, Ellie is determined to provide herself and her children with a sense of normalcy and stability- even if it means, once again, losing someone she loves.
Complete at 82,000 words, The Fine Line is women’s fiction with a heavy romance element. It has the internal character struggle of an Elizabeth Berg novel, but the love story is reminiscent of the works of Nicholas Sparks.
I graduated Summa Cum Laude from Eastern Michigan University with a degree in Sociology and a minor in Psychology. I believe my knowledge of the behavioral sciences comes across in my writing, and increases the believability of the main character’s emotional state, along with the character interactions throughout the story. Like the main character, I too worked in the field of public relations; writing press releases, and in turn, polishing my writing skills.
I have much respect for your agency, and I look forward to the possibility of working with you. Thank you for your time and consideration.
Sincerely,
Dear
When recently widowed Ellie Langston finds herself falling for her much younger and happily engaged coworker, she learns the hard way that timing truly is everything.
Thirty-five-year-old Ellie has struggled with bouts of depression for years, but when her husband dies, she’s thrown into a darkness so deep, it almost takes her life. Four months later, Ellie is on the mend, but now finds herself dealing with other obstacles, such as; going back to work after a ten-year hiatus, raising her pre-teen daughters alone, and dealing with an overprotective mother. The one thing she doesn’t have to worry about is her growing friendship with her new coworker, Aiden. Ellie can’t help but be wooed by the twenty-five-year-old’s good looks and English charm, but what appeals to the ever-anxious Ellie is his friendliness and carefree spirit.
Aiden is happily engaged, and since Ellie is recently widowed, there’s a mutual unavailability that keeps the relationship from crossing any lines. However, one slow-dance during the company Christmas party changes everything. Ellie and Aiden both realize there is something more brewing under the guise of their easy-going friendship. Aiden is ready to give up everything to pursue the unlikely romance. Ellie, however, is unable to break free from the tangled weed of guilt, fear, and responsibility that controls her. After the year she has been through, Ellie is determined to provide herself and her children with a sense of normalcy and stability- even if it means, once again, losing someone she loves.
Complete at 82,000 words, The Fine Line is women’s fiction with a heavy romance element. It has the internal character struggle of an Elizabeth Berg novel, but the love story is reminiscent of the works of Nicholas Sparks.
I graduated Summa Cum Laude from Eastern Michigan University with a degree in Sociology and a minor in Psychology. I believe my knowledge of the behavioral sciences comes across in my writing, and increases the believability of the main character’s emotional state, along with the character interactions throughout the story. Like the main character, I too worked in the field of public relations; writing press releases, and in turn, polishing my writing skills.
I have much respect for your agency, and I look forward to the possibility of working with you. Thank you for your time and consideration.
Sincerely,
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